What a beautiful mythical narrative, Metrical. I adore the fact that you used limericks as your stanza template, switching anapestic for iambic. Chaining the extra line to the next stanza was superb to read.
As I said elsewhere, I did not deliberately model the stanza form on the limerick. But now I can’t unsee the similarity! It’s the envelope rhyme + line length variations that make it look quite similar. Not intentional though.
It feels like the best kind of nursery rhyme, or perhaps a tale told around a fire in front of the mountains. Fantasy story telling. Evocative. Great work.
What a beautiful mythical narrative, Metrical. I adore the fact that you used limericks as your stanza template, switching anapestic for iambic. Chaining the extra line to the next stanza was superb to read.
As I said elsewhere, I did not deliberately model the stanza form on the limerick. But now I can’t unsee the similarity! It’s the envelope rhyme + line length variations that make it look quite similar. Not intentional though.
Makes me want to write about dragons and princesses
This is cool. The envelope rhyme and enjambment give it a lightness (form enacting the griffin flying??) that’s subtle & quite well executed.
Rather like the language here:
“With wing-beats swift and strong /
It launches into air — /
The hybrid thing “
It feels like the best kind of nursery rhyme, or perhaps a tale told around a fire in front of the mountains. Fantasy story telling. Evocative. Great work.
Enjoyed this one!
"Those fearsome paws
Had giant claws
Which pierced through haunch and hock —"